210
Zhengsu Rd #5-012
Shanghai,
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September
12, 2012
Professor
Huang Jiping
Fudan
University
Department
of Physics
220
Handan Rd Guanghua Bld #23-17
Shanghai,
200433
Dear
Prof. Huang Jiping,
I am
interested in applying for the scientific research internship position for
undergraduate student that was listed in your research website.
I am
pursuing a degree in Bachelor of Science (Physics) in Fudan University and am
currently studying at the National University of Singapore as an exchange
student. I have had a great deal of physical experimental experience in my
first 2 years. In the lab, I have performed excellently and I am skillful with mathematical
software such as Matlab and Origin in the analysis of statistics. I had built a
solid foundation on the physics frame of Theoretical Studies, which allows me
to be able to take in new concepts in your research field easily.
I am
also interested in Research and Development. I worked as an R & D assistant
at Fujian wanban Optoelectronics CO., LTD last summer and I assisted the R
& D manager in the development of a new technology, whereby the economic
life of LED bulb is increased and that innovation have the potential to save up
to more than $5000 in total. During my days in my senior high school, I made a
new style of multifunctional glasses that was equipped with rearview mirrors to
allow for rearviewing and with the addition of double polarizers which can control
the light intensity. I believe that my technical experience and passion towards
R&D would be an asset to your program.
I
believe my education and technical experience will set me as a very competitive
and ideal candidate for this research position. This internship would provide
me with the ideal opportunity to assist at your research program and to expand
my research skills.
I hope
you will look favorably at my application and I look forward to speaking with
you regarding.
Thank
you for your consideration.
Yours Sincerely,
Wu Dingding
Thanks a lot to Shiying for the helpful feedback. You are so so so kind!
ReplyDeleteHey Dingding,
ReplyDeleteYou've definitely developed your personal branding quite effectively in this cover letter. If I were to summarize, I would say that you are trying to sell the fact that you have a strong base in the theory and in software techniques because of your course. And then your personal touch would be your passion for R&D since your high school years, which are demonstrated by your 2 projects.
Is that an accurate summary?
Given what little I know about the physics internship market, I think that you marketed yourself quite well. A few ways that you could do better is to be more succinct with your words so that you can include more of anything that demonstrates that you are passionate and heavily involved in R&D, because that is your main selling point.
Other than that, your grammar has a few errors, but given that you are sending this to a Fudan university professor, I think correcting your English grammar wouldn't help your Chinese grammar...
In summary, good job! All the best for your application!
Hi Ding Ding,
ReplyDeleteThe experiences that you have included are very relevant and significant. Hence, I believe that it will make you a better candidate as compared to the rest. In addition, I agree with Min thu that you have effectively branded yourself as a person who is very passionate about research. Nevertheless, there are a few things that you may want to improve on.
1) Include the name for the scientific research internship
2) in my first 2 years of ?
3) I worked as an R & D assistant to I worked as a R & D assistant
4) Some of your sentences are too long.
For the second sentence of the third paragraph, you can consider changing to “ I worked … and assisted..new technology. This new technology led to an increment in the economic life of LED bulb, which has the potential to help the buyer saves up to more than $5000 in total.”
“ … made a new style.. intensity.” to “ … I made a new style of multifunctional glasses that can control light intensity and has rear-viewing ability.”
In general, I think that your achievements are excellent but there are a few sentence structures problem. All the best in your application!